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Unknown Rocker Review!

Unknown Rocker

Everything I Didn't Say

Grade: 5.5

Strong Points:

-I liked how the chapters were written. For some reason it really made me want to keep reading and I read five chapters without even realizing it! I feel if you had an original plot that was intriguing I could never stop reading your work.


Things to Work On:
-The summary could be improved a bit. I don't like how you put "Read my story to find out..." at the end. You shouldn't really address the reader unless you're writing a 2nd point of view story.

-The plot isn't very original. There are a lot of stories that have a similar plot. Continue with the story but for your next one come up with something really original so people will want to read it because it is so unique! :)

**SPOILER ALERT**
-I didn't like the cliche character-goes-to-a-club-and-cheats-on-girl thing you did. Everyone does it and I wish you would've done something different to add some obstacles to their relationship.
**SPOILER OVER**


Would I recommend this story to someone else? Not this story. But I love your writing style so if you had an original plot then yeah :)

Notes

Hope you're satisfied!

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Comments

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@Kat21


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

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12/31/16

@its_simplymuke


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'll just get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

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12/31/16

@XMuKeKeTcHuPX


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

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12/31/16

@Lukeifer


Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.

The author seems to be busy and you've had a wait. I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.

All you have to do is click my name and follow the form. :-)

InValid InValid
12/31/16